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Gone Away (Free verse) by Christof

How can I think of anyone but you? Your face, your mood, the trace of lilies; all this is remembrance. When you are dead, the grace of you will be gone not days or years. All time is calculation to make absence easier, evenings shorter, myself less alone. When I murmur 'only five days', my heart twists anti-clockwise.

Christof 12-Sep-02/5:58 AM
The last line continues to fox me because I'm not quite going for the meaning that you suggested before but I can't think of a better way to express the meaning I am going for. But I can revisit this some other time when my head is operating a bit better. Please re-vote! (but be kind).




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