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Let this world crumble to dust without you (Sonnet) by A_Dark_Calm

Let this world crumble to dust without you. For I cannot imagine such a world that exists without existing about you. Instead let this planet be promptly hurled into the sun and let the sun explode, consuming all the orbs in its fury and like this let the universe unfold and let it happen in a grateful hurry. Let everything there is soon disappear. Leave nothing but an endless quiet void. For like that void I am when you’re not here and nothing here for me can be enjoyed. But be with me my love and be my wife and I shall have a universe of life.

Niphredil 5-Sep-06/1:00 AM
Two last lines reminiscent of Marlowe: "Come live with me and be my Love". Nevertheless, I still like them *winks* two thumbs up. Sonnets kick ass - people should write more of them.

Stuff to be polished:
- "grateful hurry" - doesn't work for me. Why would it be grateful if the universe is being destroyed?
- "and nothing here for me can be enjoyed" - too cumbersome.




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