Niphredil5 Sep 2006

Two last lines reminiscent of Marlowe: "Come live with me and be my Love". Nevertheless, I still like them *winks* two thumbs up. Sonnets kick ass - people should write more of them.

Stuff to be polished:
- "grateful hurry" - doesn't work for me. Why would it be grateful if the universe is being destroyed?
- "and nothing here for me can be enjoyed" - too cumbersome.