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Singing (Free verse) by ThereseWaneck

Sloshin' Singin'a dripping Tune rollin' Thunder drums Blows Rockin' Lightening strikes Crashin' A sweet sad song... Pickin' up the pitch Splashin' Nature sways An instrumental sweep Kickin' "groupies" Off thier feet... Slickly steppin' steppin' steppin, to the storm of the rain songs beat...

Dovina 4-Sep-06/6:46 PM
I like the flow of this, but think some of the straight lines (lines that don't end in "in'") could be be shortened or made light:

Thunder drums
Lightening strikes
An instrumental sweep




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