ecargo31 Aug 2006

Hi Ranger. :)

I need to really read this and think about it (when has that ever stopped anyone from commenting?), but initial impressions:

metaphors are all over the place and too disconnected from one another. Some common thread to pull it together, subtle or otherwise, would give this better continuity and ground it or center it or whatever. But some excellent lines and images ("rusted gateway of a silly notion").