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Cupid promised me, Nadine (Sonnet) by Shardik

I tried to envision all of the ways To prove why our love is true But my brain day dreamed of lilac days Counting humming birds, in a golden hue You help me see so many things I know will surely come to be, and soon we'll have our platinum rings Walking the shore of an azure sea. So this,"I love you" is forever As the green shoals in your eyes And I will let no soul sever 'til the light of me flicker-sighs- back to the place where we came from With you in my arms, I feel love hum.

Engelbert Humpalot 10-Aug-06/10:11 AM
This is ungrammatical and very poorly written. The punctuation is bad as well. If I were rude I would say it stinks. It stinks.




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