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Hot (Free verse) by Dovina

Leaves hang limp outside my door. Mountains dissolve in murk. Air clogs in straining throats. Life crawls in sodden heat, while the laughing sun turns Fahrenheit degrees, tighter,like a vice; and a watched sun never sets. As evening creeps upon us, the vice reluctantly loosens, giving in a bit, first under thirsty trees, then the shaded road, and for a little while, we sleep. But the smog is mostly gone, having lost its fifties hold. The globe is warming, scientists say, and if they’re right, the children pay.

MacFrantic 31-Jul-06/1:04 PM
Good message, maybe replace the second vice with something else. Love the rhythm, especially the first stanza.




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