ecargo25 Jul 2006

I like this a lot--an electronic age bacchanal. The title's a deliberate play on "nothing ventured, nothing gained"? This is probably my favorite line: "And so many naked bodies twisted up circuitry
Signals flying everywhere and nowhere." The ending is good too.

One thing threw me though:
"
We are the living truth. The inability of
History to subjugate the human race and
The inevitable victory of intellect."

It comes out of nowhere, this god-voice exposition and really throws off the narrative, IMO. You don't really need it; it's all there in the rest of it.