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no big box to live in (Free verse) by A. Nomaly

last nite had an encounter with the park ranger. he asked me for my driver's license, yes sir, that dog needs to be on a leash at all times. oh? I didn't know, is that camper shell yours, yes sir, be sure to take it with you. Do you still live in Venice, No, I live here, Here? Here. How long have you been down here? About a week and a half, four days, 2 years, off and on. I'll give you a warning

Dovina 19-Jul-06/2:42 PM
Even with helter-skelter grammar, inordinate juxtoposition of voices, and line breaks that a novice could complain about, I followed it and liked it.




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