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The Lonesome Loser (Free verse) by Dovina

He sips his coffee, writes a line, remembers the struggle, apprehends why. He’s read to dull ears, seen eyes turn away, from his poems about nothing; even he has misgiving. Ten years since an editor’s thank-you note; still he sips and still writes, skipping slick certitudes, untangling knots. He writes what he knows, and he knows a lot, but they don’t know, and they don’t care. He lifts his pen leans back and smiles— an insider’s trust: The right eyes will see. He scans the walls for someone who might, bends forward again— maybe tonight.

ALChemy 12-Jul-06/8:05 AM
"He scans the walls
for someone who might,
bends forward again—
maybe tonight." -Haha, does this mean he's gay? Just Kiddin'.
It's really good actually. You feel sympathetic and understand the loser's possition when you read the poem but also you still feel like he's a loser.
Very nice sketch of a complex personality.




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