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How to Bleed (Free verse) by MacFrantic

Do it slowly And grimace Watch the red drops dance But never stray Never bleed alone Close your eyes Bleed in silence And be thankful that Your heart still beats

Dovina 30-Jun-06/6:36 AM
This starts out really great, like a poem that would move me. But when I get to "But never stray, Never bleed alone," the magic stops. How do you not bleed alone unless your cuts are intentional and in company of someone? The last three lines are good. Put something catchy between the good start and the good ending and this could be really good.




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