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Seizures (Free verse) by Sunny

Miniature seizures all throughout the day and landscapes of black and white. I am tired again as the sun waltzes over my head making a bow. The little things: the tulips at the store like porcelain, sky strained of all fogged impurities, old pictures of smiling dogs that were my Huskies, proud and piercing, are the apparitions I breathe deep. I don't want to be called 'delicate,' 'fragile'. I am not pregnant nor china. I will see the sun justly in it's yellow and will adore it...but for now I wait for the small glories to bloom in the morning; I am colorblind, so I will wait for the tulips and leave this static for the weak.

Ranger 1-Jun-06/6:13 AM
Made me think of an elderly yet defiant lady (old pictures, 'tired again', porcelain etc.) perhaps having just had an operation on her eyes ('sky strained of all fogged impurities'). Alternatively it could be someone who's just died after a long illness and is seeing the world clearly as a spectre.
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Okay, so I was half right. You bring good description to it - is it important to you that we see it as someone young talking? If so, it needs to be just a little clearer.

'I am tired again as the sun waltzes over my head making a bow' is utterly gorgeous. Possibly my favourite line of recent times.




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