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Godproof Hat (Limerick) by Dovina

Oh, for a hand on my cranial hair In place of god’s that isn’t there To protect from theistic wrath and such Provide a gentle protective touch Perhaps a godlike Buddhistic affair I used to think God was very large cat With teeth in my neck like I were a rat Then he kicked me outside Where I hollered and cried Now I wear a cat-skin hat

Niphredil 23-May-06/2:26 AM
Um, sorry, but this ain't a limerick. At least, the first stanza isn't. Alhough the rhyming scheme matches (aabba), limericks have very well-defined meter (three stressed syllables in lines 1,2,5 and two in lines 3,4) and this doesn't really fit the bill. Because of the differences in meter (and language, too, come to think of it), the second stanza appears quite unrelated to the first.

Having said that, it's a funny, amusing piece of work... I especially liked the first stanza.




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