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Numbers add to nothing (Free verse) by Caducus

Eighth cell one man four straps thirty four years, five murders. Three syringes four guards eighteen Witnesses thirty four years - six months and four days, gone in two minutes eleven seconds. One Bible in two limp hands, One last thought 23-09-56 exodus. four tears sixteen smiles. One priest. One prayer. One day in America nothing changes.

Caducus 20-May-06/2:34 AM
Love the exodus idea its hard and effective. You may have a point about the sixteen silies, the four tears represent the parents of the murderer and the sixteen smiles the victims parents, however I do have limits on a first draft and you've spent time crafting a thoughtful and helpful comment and i appreciate that.

Sometimes i write two versions of the poem and in this case i think i will as i can conclude with others what is best to do for the poem.

Dovina mentioned the last line which is pivotal though perhaps preachy as it leads to what the title and act does - it leads to nothing.

thanks for your comments you and dovina often support me and its good of u both.




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