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My Prayer (Free verse) by dana071287

I cry, come closer to me, it is You I want to see. Flooding my life with your love, love that is sent from above. I am crying out to You, I want a heart that is new. Revealing to me Your way, from You I will not stray. Be reflected in my life. In me let a fire burn, and for You may my soul yearn, so You may take away my strife. To You alone will I pray for You to show me the way. My heart will You please renew, I want to follow you, too. I look to heaven above, and cry for more of Your love to share with the people I see, to say what You mean to me.

Ranger 12-May-06/12:36 PM
I wouldn't worry too much about the syllable count, to be honest. It's more important that you get the rhythm right by working out syllable stress - the easy way to figure this out is to see if a reading of your poem requires you to pronounce a word differently to normal. Also, I wasn't sure whether or not to say earlier, but don't force the words into the rhythm. 'I want a heart that is new' feels like the sentence has been strung out to fit the rhythm. The best way to get round this is to enjamb the lines.
Good luck with your writing - this site is an excellent place for learning to both read and write poetry. Actually, that's the other thing I should say - developing skills at reading poetry is vital for writing. Poemranker offers the chance to do both.




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