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Freud Spoke Of A Mother's Tongue, But I Interpret Dreams (Free verse) by Ranger

Every image is disguised under normal circumstances- Now, to be extraordinary Sleep must fall like ash -blot the sky And then a strange medicine will arise, blind and blessed As if a clock-face were some lunar arc -her name is Celeste The secret is in words which murmur; while lying, prone to doubling up lithe, nearly unconscious long slumber as smoke from a gun, placed by the hip - not eyes - in grace Pupils closed, to cite... ...owl, owl of agony with a dark stare which winds upwards Owl with butterfly wings Peacock left, a gatekeeper's right To close beneath the night gale's whispering Why so soundless, vision, when carrying this message of loss? A song would be appropriate for a night bird flying Danger soaring past the scene Past walls, God, scent, Past jasmine... Awakening is like the new flame Flicker uncertainly Unconvinced Yet the owl spoke true- She left me that day

Niphredil 1-May-06/2:29 PM
First read:
I read the comments concerning therapists and patients, but I never associated the poem with either; they're far too mundane. This poem is a dream; and I read it just as though I were waking up, trying to piece together bits and pieces of an idea which was blindingly clear just the instant before I awoke. All I can recall at this moment are scattered pictures; flickering memories; a swoop in the distance. And she left me.

Second read:
I can see the dream interpretation theme in the first verse, particularly in the first line of every stanza. It would seem as though the first line describes a reality, and the following lines the dream. They could, in fact, be read separately and still make sense.

I did however enjoy the puns, although I seriously doubt I figured them all out, though. And of course, your trademark ;-)

Solid 10 for a indecently beautiful piece of work. I love a poem that makes me think. But beware of loading your stuff down with too many underlying meanings; you might be too subtle for the rest of us. :-)




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