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Before Departing (Free verse) by italenrico

Quiet exhalations, incoherent murmurs slowly pulsing vein in your temple, pre-dawn light casting beautiful shadows across the room, across your body. Replacing the blankets you kicked away in some fevered sleep long gone; tucking you in like the child I'll never have tender caress across your stubbled cheek. Birdcalls from outside, and you stir; leaning down, pressing a kiss gently to your unlined forehead; closing the door behind me as I leave.

pollywolly 1-May-06/1:44 PM
i found this quite a sentimental piece and must admit i rather liked the "tucking you in like a child" line as this portrays the innocence that love can be. great descriptive work




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