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Deja Vu (Lyric) by sliver

I've been here once. Of that I'm sure But to give a time I'm a bit reserved. The scenery has changed Although the landscape appears the same. Something beyond the horizon Has been varied in some vague way. Perhaps it was only a dream, But if it was I'm still in it. Maybe if you pinch me hard I'll come back and then re-live it. But for now I'll close my eyes To these subtleties of life, As these waves wash over my ankles And the sun gives way to night.

Ranger 28-Apr-06/12:29 PM
More interesting now but I have to suggest (and you can kill me for this if you like) that you need to bring the waves in somewhere earlier rather than just chucking them in out of the blue, so to speak. Perhaps bring the sea in where you talk about the horizon and you would achieve a little more continuity.
Still decent enough though.




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