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Deja Vu (Lyric) by sliver

I've been here once. Of that I'm sure But to give a time I'm a bit reserved. The scenery has changed Although the landscape appears the same. Something beyond the horizon Has been varied in some vague way. Perhaps it was only a dream, But if it was I'm still in it. Maybe if you pinch me hard I'll come back and then re-live it. But for now I'll close my eyes To these subtleties of life, As these waves wash over my ankles And the sun gives way to night.

god'swife 28-Apr-06/12:53 AM
You have no grasp on human existence. I cannot even venture to guess what childhood atrocities must have been inflicited on you to make you want to write such an empty and uninspired piece of shit as this. You're just one more sorry ass strutting around in this pitiful sanctuary for self-important asses. This drivel lacks all relevancy. Is this what you sit around pondering about? Is this the most intriguing most profound most soulful experience you can write about? What the fuck, are you some kind of horrible mutant? Try 'writing' something pertinent, germane, material, apropos to the soul and its struggle. It's tragic that such a bunch of heartless pukes have turned a once stimulating arena of thought into a incestuious hotbed of superfluous and inferior banter. The fact that some idiots feel it neccessary, let alone plausible, to leave comments on such atrocities is only more proof that you've all completely lost connection with the drama of human existence. You should all be ashamed of yourselves. Get a life. A real one consisting of love and loss, pain and exrutiating ecxtasy, the awareness of our absurd and fleeting existence. You're all stuck in a boring putrid land of make believe. Fucking losers.

You are vague. Your poem is vague. Your life is one vague boring monotone.




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