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Murder Phoenix Born (meta-villanelle) (Villanelle) by Ranger

Pitched around inside this whirling fayre Quill-scratch scream - swift dart from lava flow A fallen leaf turns often in the air Thought of glory's talons in his hair Instead - a rosy skull, a cap of woe Pitched around inside this whirling fayre Across the burning hills he cried 'Beware The flash of early column light', as though A fallen leaf turns often in the air This small bird was cremated there Smoke-dawn lark encircled by grim crows Pitched around inside this whirling fayre There gathered flocks of ashes never shared Which would scatter like a broken stone A fallen leaf turns often in the air Quiet offer of a simple prayer Arrow feathered, hewn from speckled bone Pitched around inside this whirling fayre A fallen leaf turns often in the air

Ranger 26-Apr-06/11:55 AM
I doubt very much whether 'meta-vil' is a true class of poetry, but I've used it as a reflection of the metaku (a haiku about writing a haiku - this poem is a villanelle about writing a villanelle). Essentially, think of the poem as a phoenix; the dying phoenix is a false start which gets turned into a new poem. That may or may not make sense...I have probably over-complicated this poem if I'm honest. It can be summed up in the fallen leaf line.
And then there's the play on 'feathered', which was partly to join the stories together and partly for fun. This was written to demand rereads and a close analysis - thanks for taking the time =D




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