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Lost and Found (Prose Poem) by annadoc

I'm lost and I'm found Differences abound; I'm weak and I'm strong to be a part, oh "to belong" I'm short and I'm tall will the last facade fall? I'm light and I'm dark the contrast is stark; I'm joy and I'm pain what is to be our gain? I sink and I swim pour the glass of gin; I lose and I win can't we all be put in? I'm lost and I'm found ... I'm losing ground I'm cruel, but I'm kind I want peace of mind.

Niphredil 25-Apr-06/4:00 AM
And I was reminded of Alanis Morissette's 'Hand in My Pocket':
"...I'm high but I'm grounded
I'm sane but I'm overwhelmed
I'm lost but I'm hopeful, baby"

I must admit that the stark and cliched comparisons ("I sink and I swim", for instance, or "I'm short and I'm tall") don't seem to convey any particular meaning to me. If you were to use two words in each comparison that are not exact opposites, yet convey a subtler contrast, I feel the poem would make for a more interesting read.




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