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Buddy (Free verse) by ALChemy

Even as I stroke the smooth fur capped scalp of Buddy, as his head sinks in servitude beneath the gentle weight of my hand, even as his eyes recline in glossy ecstasy as if to say you may snap my neck in a twist of your wrist and I shall die by your will a grateful sacrifice, even in the simple petting of a loyal dog I find my own life fails to be so full as that of this mongrel beneath my palm. For my master runs not a finger through my hair.

lmp 18-Apr-06/3:07 PM
wow. this reminds me of a sappy yet somehow tearjerkish poem i read once about the dog as the ever willing servant to the master, licking the hand that beats him, and so on.

but, the last line clinches it. the plot twist. leading us along a stray thread only to tie it all in at the end. very nice.

however, maybe your master *does* run fingers through your hair, but not literally (oh that's good, since we speak on the written word!).

very good.




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