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Upheaval (in a minor key) (Free verse) by ecargo

There was only so much for the asking; now we’re counting the days down to a different end. An open hand’s another way of letting go. We’re down to the finer points: whether we’ll be friends; how to split the souvenirs of undone years. Love once blurred the differences now grown again distinct and edged. We grew like tree roots, entwined, misaligned, cracking the foundations and pulling up everything.

Ranger 18-Apr-06/2:26 PM
Hmm. Nice to read, ecargo, thoughtful and full of regret. Every Pimple poet should read this to learn how these should be done, how the emotion should be controlled. I know I could have done with it at times. Great second stanza.
Could the open hand idea give rise to card games? In a way it's the juxtaposition of honesty and competition. Honesty rarely wins in competition. And I rarely make sense in these sort of comments. Ah well.
Good work.




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