poemranker ::Replying

ReplyTo a comment on Cólera by MacFrantic.

Ranger17 Apr 2006

Cool. You might think about changing 'blood lets...' to 'blood letting/Sheer volume deliver/Where failing interest...'. It would keep the original 'blood lets' meaning, while also adding a little more coherence to that passage. As it is, there are three decent yet mostly unconnected lines. Otherwise, good fun.