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Another quarter. (Free verse) by richa

This scalding season of frost and wind pressed to earth’s face. The polyanthus that I thought were dead bloom yellow and red and purple and white. The lawn loses its scent like a left out pie. The rev and splutter of blades as my little petrol mower rides sticks and cuts the grass like a cigar. I sniff the burn and perfumes. The lopped stems garnish. The worms come out to listen, the birds to eat.

MacFrantic 16-Apr-06/10:56 AM
Th last two lines are great. "I sniff" and "frozen pie" seemed a little off to me. *7*




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