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parlor games (Free verse) by digipoet

he throws a dart an ambitious arc has it struck the mark? her gaze asphyxiates "i don't play darts"

Ranger 7-Apr-06/12:07 AM
Hmm, failed chat-up line followed up by an icy stare, this is brief and effective. Did you ever read drnick's 'Buried in the Booth'? Pretty much the polar opposite of this.
I'd be tempted to put another line after 'her gaze asphyxiates', probably one to keep the rhyme more solid there. Maybe just 'unfazed', or something like that. Otherwise, very cool.




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