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Simon's Legacy (draft) (Free verse) by Caducus

I was your womb sonic a prince of failed grain harvested from liquor off the M43 near Glasgow. You were my Mother the darling of curbs who fed me needles and a breast for subway coins. My Father was my brother he once played with matches for fire brought attention and a red chariot of stern Fathers. My brother was my hero he saved me many times and saved himself till I left Mum to hang himself from his fire truck. At my brothers funeral I gave my Mum a present, the sonogram of Simon and the note he left, the next day i saw her she wore a long black dress and looked like Ava Garner.

Sunny 6-Apr-06/11:17 AM
I don't rate like that, well, ever since I became a member of this site. Penetrable (I can relate to family suicide as well). Your poem as a whole was brilliantly thought up & scorched onto paper (or post). No more I can say about this except it deserves much better ratings than it has recieved...I can see the incredible talent in this peice.

~Sunny




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