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9/11 - The Jumpers (Free verse) by Caducus

Kodak graves Imperial canvasses, where the fallen made impact as flesh spears in soft pools of voyeurs eyes. Kodak graves, desecrated by censorship by memory assassins in a white house built on the land of free speech. It happened, pavements were portals leaving a symphony of haunting vellum drums. It happened, Allah was a household name his beard an omen in cirrhus clouds, Islam’s message was a 747 on a jouney to America crash landing on Muslims. It happened. The jumpers jumped. Twin towers fell and what has risen ?

zodiac 31-Mar-06/7:59 AM
"cirrus clouds". "747". "journey to America".

Besides that, you've somehow managed to make poetic writing sound even clumsier and less-poetic than normal speech.




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