Ranger30 Mar 2006

Cool stuff, I thought the first line of stanza 2 was a bit unoriginal and didn't quite fit with the rest of that stanza. I like the rhyme scheme and the quick rhythm of it. 'My mind cannot fathom even in post-graduate fashion' is a smart line.
I actually think the last stanza might just about hold up...but ecargo is right that it doesn't sound right when read.