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Butterfly Belly, Orchid Face (Free verse) by Sunny

Butterflies, clamped hands, a sight (a euphoric vision to the beholder), with physical want and mental cravings like a pregnant woman’s. That is love in all its glory, resounding off color: a ricochet of lovely words off skeletal trees. The mango sun will shed its coat to radiate a brighter yellow sun, and the hazy-eye sky imitates the elegance of London’s smog head cold; you that see exaggerated reality, must be kissed by love, must have a fluttered belly, it will grow you a dazzling orchid.

Dovina 22-Mar-06/10:47 AM
A love poem that I actually love. "you that see exaggerated reality, must be kissed by love" - great.

The first verse could lose the () for a preposition with better flow, I think.

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