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The Devil's Carnival (Villanelle) by Ranger

Flashing lights become a string of pearls Flailing arm a blur in fast descent Crashing down so quick, this crying girl A measured joke designed by grinning churl Laughter follows cracks in porcelain Flashing lights become a string of pearls Merry, aren't you in this teacup twirl? Spinning swifter - see how far you bend! Crashing down so quick, this crying girl A banner of the devil's face unfurls Crossing tents of concentrating men Flashing lights become a string of pearls Sing for us, you fragile little merle Body blackened, blue eyes look so zen Crashing down so quick, this crying girl Let us paint your face with streaks and swirls Tomorrow you must visit us again! Flashing lights become a string of pearls Crashing down so quick, this crying girl

Ranger 13-Mar-06/8:30 AM
A fair point - there is a purpose to the word choice there. First (and least of all) it's in keeping with the fairground 'merry-go-round' theme. Second, it's one of the reactions you'd tend to get from ride attendants to children who've suddenly decided they don't like the ride they're on. And thirdly it attempts to encapsulate the sort of attitude of people who gang up on individuals for kicks (no pun intended); they quite clearly can't understand why it's distressing for the individual being pushed around (teacup twirl). With any luck, that explanation will make things a bit clearer.
Personally I despise the theme in this, but as a poem I think it works quite well.




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