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Boundaries (Free verse) by Dhanesh M Kumar

The four walls fortifying the realms make it to yell beyond the walls, The fetters that build it to quell the fondle triggers a wobbly, Staggering changeling. This child edifies the nature’s statue that which bonds till the pyre, an incredible Crinkle deep in the roots, an infamous urge to Crackle the chains. A passionate bird that migrate miles; A jubilant dolphin that divulge to ether; A giraffe’s head that jettisons out; All of these are Mother’s credentials.

Ranger 13-Mar-06/5:23 AM
Either there's a hidden genius in this that I am blind to (entirely possible)...or you really do need to make some serious grammatical corrections. 'Four walls fortifying the realm(s?)' is good, 'make it to yell' is not. 'To yell' is the infinitive, and so in this context shouldn't be used with 'make it', which is present active. The three lines after that...I don't really know what they mean.
'The nature's statue that which bonds' could work, but needs punctuating. '...statue - that which bonds...' or something like that. The rest of the stanza sort of work although 'crinkle' would sound better as 'crinkling'.
Stanza 3 - 'migrates' and 'divulges', as you are talking about a first person singular subject for both. I like the ending to it though.

But I still have to ask - what does it all mean?




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