Niphredil9 Mar 2006

This is extremely good. However, I disagree with Ranger in that it still needs some work.

First and foremost, 'Seppuku' jarred on me intensely because I had envisioned a medieval setting; it doesn't seem to harmonize at all with the rest of the poem.
In addition, shouldn't "conquered by I" be "conquered by me; the Black Prince"?

Not until I had read the poem again did I notice that the narrator was forced to conquer the kingdom; but the other prince was greeted by cheer(s?) and garlands. I guess he had it easier...