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Wet Paint (A Blond Point of View) (Lyric) by Miggy

Don’t assume with my shiny red shoes That I am hailed as a dating professional My apologies that the plan handed you a loss But I shall not take the fall (Chorus) Yet I will bring you to your hidden lusts Your mistakes in the past was a matter of fate The personality will be complemented with an added punch After a touch of some wet paint The fact you are crazy innocent Was not the reason he wasn’t attracted But this new flare will give an added effect For the ugliness comes from your fashion (Chorus) Your elegant sentences Cannot be heard From a bucket of blemishes With yellow teeth And nose like a bird’s Not to mention the smelly feet But don’t you worry After I’m done you won’t be disappointed (Chorus/Ending)

Dovina 3-Mar-06/1:08 PM
How do you bring her her hidden lusts. She already has them. Maybe you mean that you reveal them.

The last verse is good. The first verse and the chorus have potential, but need work.




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