Ranger3 Mar 2006

The problem with changing the mist stanza is that I need 'avail' in its intransitive form to keep the wordplay - the mist seems like a veil (in keeping with the marriage theme, you see). It's annoyingly clumsy in that passage, I just don't yet know how to alter it while retaining the meaning.
I could get rid of the silent toast, it's quite an awkward phrase...although again it fits the 'dream of wedding' theme.
Hmm, help needed, methinks.