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isomers (Free verse) by skaskowski

lost inside a solid stone, the wall around an aqua-dome. my opinion: undeterred and my decisions: unobserved. make the same mistake twice just for the hell of it. what's a reminder without parallel scars?

LilMsLadyPoet 1-Mar-06/10:10 AM
I like the first stanza...alot! then the 2nd...AWwww...man...this had the potential to go a long way. My suggestion? scratch out the last stanza, stash it in a pile somewhere, and then rediscover it sometime in the future, when you will be inspired to write more...and the cerebral climax it calls for! 9 on the first stanza. hmm...2nd...use it in another realistic and ironic piece.




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