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Whalecrack (Other) by wlshepherd

Whalecrack and poppycock, I sprained my sock. Sleek mac wont mend my shack, Or hurt my back. Sea-gull egg, I weep and beg- Don't touch my leg. Treacle fever, from an unbeliever, Sent to bed by the snake-hipped weaver. Through greasy rain and warming pain, I start to descend the hill again.

LilMsLadyPoet 1-Mar-06/8:21 AM
I post,vote, and then go read the votes and comments...that said...I'll be interested in how people took this...I never know in here! I like the last two stanzas, good rythm and they seem to form an ending to a picture of something...but the previous lines don't draw a picture or mean anything, to me, and are lacking in every way.




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