ALChemy23 Feb 2006

You're always welcome to blah blah on my poems as much as you like. Your critiques are among my favorites.
"Who hasn't learned/that what is earned/might not be rewarded/but if forwarded [?]/may not come on schedule" is not a question but a description of the "fool" in stanza two. Unless your question is what do I mean by "forwarded". I just mean sent or given by that. As far as nature vs one man's peace of mind: If one man hates the sight of the moon should the moon be destroyed? "There are more things in heaven and earth, Horatio, than are dreamt of in your philosophy" Nature is far greater in scale than one man's needs. Since nature consists of the many, the one is always out numbered. The chalice/palace represents riches and divinity. "He's so focused on the chalice/palace -he might miss what he's won through his own efforts" is right on the mark. The needs of nature is the answer to why his needs aren't all fulfilled and so he should appreciate and seize the gifts and oppertunities that are given to him and not dwell too much on what he didn't get.