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The Mirror (Free verse) by TLRufener

Smash the mirror I cannot bear to see myself Take away the windows I do not wish to see my reflection Tears of hatred and fear Are the only makeup I wear I have tried to run from the truth But it follows me everywhere It is my shadow Attached to my weakening body My spirit is heavy Dragging down my fragile being Thoughts promenading in my head Twisting the image of reality Rearranging the truth I seek I do not know how to feel What to believe Where to turn Who to be Who I have been Has never pleased the mirror Who I have become Displeases it even more My reflection loathes me It hates everything about me Though it never speaks

Ranger 23-Feb-06/4:44 AM
There's nothing wrong with wanting to put your own feelings/emotions into a poem, but for me particularly a poem is far more appealing without repeated use of 'I/me/my' etc. See if you can find a way of writing this that isn't in the first person - maybe try writing it from the mirror's point of view. Alternatively, my favourite trick is to invent a new point of view - something else in the room watching you, for instance. It just makes it more intriguing for the reader - and also allows for a bit more innovation.




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