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The Mirror (Free verse) by TLRufener

Smash the mirror I cannot bear to see myself Take away the windows I do not wish to see my reflection Tears of hatred and fear Are the only makeup I wear I have tried to run from the truth But it follows me everywhere It is my shadow Attached to my weakening body My spirit is heavy Dragging down my fragile being Thoughts promenading in my head Twisting the image of reality Rearranging the truth I seek I do not know how to feel What to believe Where to turn Who to be Who I have been Has never pleased the mirror Who I have become Displeases it even more My reflection loathes me It hates everything about me Though it never speaks

Blue Magpie 23-Feb-06/12:24 AM
Without being unkind, and in the realisation that your personnal suffering is quite real, can I suggest that as poetry this is pretty boring, I have read pretty much the same thing thousands of times. The feelings are not uncommon, and while that doesn't make them less painful for you it should make you realise that if you wish to put them into a poem that others are going to read, and if the poem is going to be a success then you have to offer something that the 100,000 or so people who have already written this same poem, in different but uninspiring ways had to offer. There is more to good poetry than putting your feelings on paper with a set of line-breaks. Some other conventional punctuation would help also.




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