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Just Desserts (for drnick) (Other) by ALChemy

What lessons might be learned by those who's folly is to lament a life that lemons left a sour taste to memories bereft of smiles? As love's deniles through time can leave one's mind quite melancholy. For the sun has yet to fall before I've spied another fool Who's cried and cried in blasphame, "Oh lord why have you forsaken me?" Who hasn't learned that what is earned might not be rewarded but if forwarded may not come on schedule. For nature is far grander in scale than one man's peace of mind and try and try as he will, he will not find the golden chalice or holy palace that he believes is his to recieve but that the bread he's won has gone stale. How time is wasted by those who feel thier "just desserts" deserve to be served. For in thier need on sweets to feed they've entirely missed the bountiful meal and thus they will be starved.

drnick 21-Feb-06/5:58 PM
There are some small errors in this one, but I like it all the same. I like the way you've worded what you're trying to get across...it's like you've taken the direct meaning and turned your head so it's just barely in your peripheral vision. It's also something I need to work on.

It's strange that I agree with what you're saying and everything, but yet find it difficult to be content. Then again, it wouldn't exactly be good to be completely content either as one would have no ambition to achieve anything greater than what they have. Perhaps the best idea is to continue to persue one's dreams while never losing appreciation for what one already has. Maybe I can rewrite my old one with that theme in mind. Thanks for putting this up here for me, that was very kind of you.




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