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Oaxaca city fragment (Free verse) by poetandknowit

hollow gut women search shit filled gutters for food scraps mongrel pups ready for the razor and half feathered, Johne's infested starving cocks sniffed and pecked past, before being caught and butchered to feed bony yellow babies sickened by birth.

Christof 10-Sep-02/6:43 AM
Really good visceral stuff, but might read more easily if 'passed' became 'past' and if the women searched in the past tense with the cocks.




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