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A daisy chain for Nina (Free verse) by Caducus

From Nina's hands my face turned to waves and when she kissed me, I was seven and ancient. Stuart Barr spat at her And I did nothing except wipe his hate from her lips which loved me. In the summer of 82 she made me a daisy chain. We married by the swamp and I carved our names on conifer. In the winter of 82 Nina wore a headscarf, Stuart Barr spat at her then he cried and went home. In the summer of 83 I returned to the swamp a widow, kneeled by our altar of conifer kissing the daisy chain she made me laying mine next to it by her favourite sweets.

Scarlett 21-Feb-06/8:05 AM
I'm sure I'm off base on this, especially given the comments following the poem.

But it seems to me that these are children throughout the entire poem.

She made a daisy chain, ah ~ that is sweet. I remember making flowers into necklaces when I was a young girl... but enough of that - brought back a lovely memory, 'tis all.

The marriage in the swamp is something children "play" at - playing house type of thing came to mind.

The headscarf - immediately made me think of cancer. Too many young face this and other children don't understand, they fear what's different...

The ache in the end, that she passed away ~ forever cherished, just as the chain is unending. Well, that's my ramblings...




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