Ranger16 Feb 2006

No worries, that's what this place is for!
I was just reading through it again and I'd be interested to see if this works better as a prose poem; it is essentially a story in style, but not format. Maybe you'd consider writing it out in story form and then adding the adjectives etc. I remember seeing someone on here saying that's what they do, it might have been ALChemy, or perhaps zodiac (or maybe my memory has gone altogether...). In any case, if you have the time then give it a go - see what you come up with.