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Together they Fell (Free verse) by Fayt

And so it falls, a tear from her ocean blue eyes, He was perfect she told herself, He was everything I wanted, Everything I dreamed of, But now he’s gone, He’s not here, And will never return. And so it falls, a tear from his pure brown eyes, She will never be back, She will never return, She was everything I wanted, All that I needed, But she is gone, And left me for dead. And so they fall, tears from each of their blank faces as they head to the city bridge, The bridge which stood so high that some swear they have touched the clouds, They both peer off the edge, about 5 yards apart, A huge pole separates the two broken hearts, They could not see each other; They each whispered a parting prayer, and then simultaneously they jumped, Never having a second thought. And so they fell, two broken hearts falling side by side, The young man looks to his right, the young girl looks to her left, In midair their eyes connect, and they realize it, Each revealing to the other the face of true love, It is easy to see in the adjacent eyes that they are perfect together, That they are complete. And so they fall, further down into the empty air, Heading for a freezing cold ocean, Slowly they raise smiles to each other, And each raises a hand towards the other; Their hands connect and they fall together hand in hand. And so they fell, only feet now from the icy ocean, They hit the water and break its plane in chorus, It’s too late for them, death upon impact, Floating on top of the freezing water still hand in hand, Before slowly sinking into the abyss of the ocean deep. As they fell together, they both thought it was worth it, Finding love was all they ever wanted out of life, They had found all they ever dreamed of, Falling, together, to their deaths.

Ranger 16-Feb-06/9:26 AM
I like the story in this, although I feel it would benefit from more descriptive language. 'Huge pole' is very simplistic and doesn't feel right in this; even just saying 'concrete pole' puts a little more imagery into this. See what you think.




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