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Journeyman (Free verse) by Glasseyez

I have traveled far and wide you know Seen four the seven seas, The beach the snow and auroras glow These things aren’t new to me, Come and go like the seasons flow No telling where I might be, I wonder round the ancient grounds Forests, lochs, and streams, Never finding always searching For a place that I might go, A place where there is everything A man like me could dream, I travel round from town to town Singing the same old song, “Might I find a friendly place Where a man like me belongs, I have traveled far and wide you know Seen four the seven seas, I long to find a place that’s nice Where I can just be me”

Glasseyez 14-Feb-06/11:44 AM
Yea I meant four of the seven seas, but i thought that would sound too drawn out, I actually have heard that before, maybe i will just pick up a poetry for dummies book something informative just so I can know the proper way to write a decent poem, with the grammer and all. I appreciate your constructive criticm, thinking of ways to use it without ruining the poems altogether. I am still on the level where i just write what sounds good to me and makes sense. I need to work on using metaphors better and more often. I wrote this listening to johnny cash so I guess I was just thinking about his voice while working on it.




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