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Monkey Tree (Breathless edit) (Free verse) by ecargo

We hid, sheltered in green, the welter of boles, knobs, boughs that grew to ground our hollow bower; clambered limb to limb, lithe and nimble, limber, scrambling; shinned high, gripped broad branches with our knees, and dangled upside- down, hands clasped tight and swinging, heads a- spin; tangled tongues beneath the leafy canopy; fumbled tingled; watched the tie-dyed slide of violet night as Venus swelled; and laughed until we fell.

zodiac 12-Feb-06/1:19 PM
"Bower" is a bad word choice. I think this is one of the few times where wild indentation helps the poem. Good one.




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