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Dear Dad, Dear Mom, Dear Me (Lyric) by Miggy

Dear Dad, I hope the best is going for you always Every time you try to call me Half-way ‘round the world To see what I must endure Dear Dad, I take aspirins in the morning And try to look for glory In my days Hoping that in the end you say (Chorus) Oh, I’m so proud of you And I believed that you could do it too Dear Mom, I hope the best for you in heaven Though are talk before were never I was too young Couldn’t identify the guitar Dear Mom, In a few months I’ll be eighteen Pack my stuff and I’ll be leaving For my life Wishing you say right by my side (Chorus) Dear Me, I made too many sins before And just kept thinking the want encores Of my deeds Their attention was my need Now I will change for the better And write myself this letter To fix my gears Hoping one day I will hear (Chorus/Ending)

drnick 9-Feb-06/9:49 PM
Wow...this is really bad. Come on, man, I know you're better than this. These sound like country-pop lyrics, and that music is for the musically retarded. Try to not be so obvious with what you're talking about, or say something profound if you do want to be direct.




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