poemranker ::Replying

ReplyTo a comment on Memoirs of a miners son by Caducus.

richa8 Feb 2006

Very good. Anvil eyed needs a hyphen or the anvil is doing the eying. Davy lamp doesn't need quotation marks, and is a much more relevant and precise image than hero's sword. The details give it pathos and I think it benefits from not being overloaded with adjectives.