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time (3rd draft) (Haiku) by Adriaan

Goldfish contemplate raindrops rippling the surface Ice ends disturbance

Ranger 7-Feb-06/3:14 AM
Keep it as it is; there is no such thing as a universally pronouncable haiku. As I said, I really like the idea behind it, and this draft is much more haiku-esque.




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