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time (3rd draft) (Haiku) by Adriaan

Goldfish contemplate raindrops rippling the surface Ice ends disturbance

richa 6-Feb-06/2:50 PM
It looks more like a haiku. Haikus demand economy. They often have two images the second cutting across the first. They have no message as such. They are sensory. If you think you have some interesting wisdom do an epigram.




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